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Yellow Box by ~kgstv:iconkgstv:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Narrative > Haiku & Eastern


from within myself
I hear mechanical clicks
of pointless breathing
©2008-2009 ~kgstv
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from the perspective of a robot who longed to be a human, but knew that, deep down, he'd always be a machine..

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~SpAmSaLoT Dec 23, 2008, 7:16:58 AM
My PC completely agrees :)
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=MaverickKay Dec 23, 2008, 9:29:21 AM
Very creative. xD My mac gives it a 10/10

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What a shame we all became- such fragile broken things,
My memory remains
Just a tiny spark
I give it all my oxygen
So Let The Flames Begin
So Let The Flames Begin, Oh Glory
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*Xphringe Dec 23, 2008, 12:45:48 PM
my pc would agree, but he is wayyy to hooked on crack.
but i'm sure he knows the feeling. lol.
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~Vuri Dec 23, 2008, 11:03:01 PM
I love how you titled it "Yellow Box" when you used words like "Mechanical" and "Pointless".

((Sorry I've been kinda absent the past couple/few weeks. My computer broke and I had to wait until my new one came in which took forever. But now I'm back, to admire your lovely works. :] ))

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"It is tea I relish the most, because this simple beverage, birthed from the herbs and spices of our organic sphere, soothes, warms, and refreshes the body, mind, and soul, creating an everlasting blanket of tranquility."
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~kgstv Dec 24, 2008, 4:46:29 AM
it's all good, and thank you. it's nice to have you back :cuddle:

Merry Christmas =)


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.■ kris flores ■.

my website -> click :halfliquid:
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~LoloTehWormie Dec 26, 2008, 3:59:57 PM
he could be the next bicentennial man?

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Lo

disturbing and violent...its fucking amazing!!! - Sarah Davison
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~pardonM3 Dec 28, 2008, 11:28:07 PM
I initially thought of someone who was near-death, waiting in a hospital bed.

Is this piece also dream-inspired?
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~kgstv Dec 28, 2008, 11:37:50 PM
yep =)
Apparently, my dreams are far more creative than I am lol.
I would never have thought of something like this in my conscious state

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.■ kris flores ■.

my website -> click :halfliquid:
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~Masheli Jan 18, 2009, 9:28:27 PM
I like that little verse. It sends a strong message for such short lines.

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It's kind of fun to do the impossible.
~Walt Disney

Zazu: He'd make a very handsome throw rug...
Mufasa: Zazu!!!
Zazu: And just think whenever he gets dirty you can take him out and beat him!!
~The Lion King
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